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All The White Horses: Part Two (2/5)
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How many moments passed as Dana found herself lost in her thoughts were
beyond her but she was brought back to the present by the gentle touch
of Alice holding her chin and lifting her head up. Looking up into
earnest brown eyes that held such love and affection she felt like
crying at it, Dana closed her eyes and sighed as Alice cupped her
cheeks, caressing her skin in a whisper soft touch. “You look so good
with short hair, Dane,” Alice said in a hushed murmur, stepping closer
to duck her head down while speaking into the athlete’s ear. Her hands
fell away from Dana’s face to wrap around her waist, pulling her into a
comforting embrace that the athlete instinctively returned. Then Alice
said playfully, “Better than me even.”
Laughing through her tears, Dana buried her face in Alice’s neck and
she knew they were probably being looked at by anyone who was passing
by but she couldn’t seem to care. Not when she was in Alice’s arms and
everything felt so very right with the world. They stayed like that
until her ears caught the faint sound of carnival type music and she
lifted her head from Alice’s shoulder to stare at a building a block or
so away.
A grin immediately formed on her features as she realized what the
building was and Dana looked to Alice who wore a fond but expectant
look on her face. “You knew,” she said in slightly accusing but
entirely pleased tones. “You knew that there was a fun and game center
that had skeeball on this part of the beach, didn’t you?”
“Perhaps,” said Alice, attempting to sound rather lofty as she grinned
and squeezed Dana’s hand which she was now holding. “Come on,
Fairbanks. Lets try and break our skeeball records. What was the total
ticket amount the last time we did this? Three hundred and fifty?”
“It was three thousand and fifty!” cried Dana in something close to
outrage. “You can’t get anything with three hundred and fifty tickets
but that lame oversized plastic comb, Al.”
“I don’t care what you or Shane says, that comb could totally be used
by the freakishly tallest members of the NBA or maybe Bigfoot,” said
Alice stubbornly, nodding her head for emphasis.
“Right,” said Dana as she rolled her eyes humorously.
Her smile widened as Alice began her theory about how the taller NBA
players could be somehow related to Bigfoot and as they walked into the
fun and game center, the sounds of buzzers and whizzers and the kaching
of high scores being made Dana couldn’t believe just how happy she
felt. She knew it wasn’t because of the games or the fact that next to
tennis she loved skeeball above all other sports but instead the fact
that Alice had done this for her. And as they walked to the counter to
pay for their game tokens, Dana wondered if Alice’s heart was a prize
sitting on that huge and seemingly endless wall filled with objects
often beyond comprehension how many tickets it would cost to win.
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OK – I just read the first chapter and this one – dreiser – awesome. truly. funny, sweet, sad, hopeful and bittersweet. I’d expect nothing less from you though. Very well done!
That was beautiful. Awesome writing as usual. Great way to end that chapter. Looking forward to the next.
Absolute perfection. I’ve said it before and I’ll say it again no doubt, but your writing is amazing. And I’m not just talking about the grammar, which is a big pet-peeve of mine, but I’m talking about the way you portray and characterize each character to form. You perfectly write and vocalize Alice and Dana (no doubt because of your love for the characters), but you also have a good sense for portraying all of the others. I know you love Helena, as do I, and I like how you are forming her as she’ll hopefully be portrayed in S3 (although I do like snarky Helena too!). I know where this story is heading, mainly from checking in at your journal for updates, and I’m still excited about it because of how it’s written. Anyway, long-winded I know, but I have to give accolades to your talent.
Awww i am soo inlove with this story! The way you write the characters is spot on! This chapter was just amazing! Please update soon
Thank you for this story. Yours are stories I can read over and over again and always love. Perfect.
Simply Awsome, I hope the actual season of Alice and Dana’s relationship is at least half as good as it is in your story, keep up the great work!!
That was great. Your writing is amazing. I love angst and there was enough to go around in this chapter. Their love confession was…beautiful. Great job.
I have read it more than one time and I found more and more things that I like in your story. I said before but danish has unbelieveble writers, thanks.
Hiya, I’m a silent lurker, BUT your stuff is great…the only other person here with as much talent to hold my attention is Ms.Layla_Gray, but you capture the couple like no one esle…keep it up and you have another fan here….Peace.
IC created the characters, but I am amazed by how well you “get” them. I’m sitting here at my desk feeling happy because Alice and Dana were able to admit their feelings for each other. At the same time there is a bittersweet feeling because there is a good chance that the overall ending of the story will not be happy. It’s sad that two people who were so well suited for each other and so in love had to waste so much time. But it makes for a great story for us. I will bide my time re-reading the first two parts until you post again. Thanks for another wonderful story.
I usually lurk, but I just had to comment. Beautiful. Your writing is simply beautiful. The character development, the story development, I feel more like a voyeur than a reader!! Thank you!
Amazing! I had butterflies in my stomach the entire time I read this story. You write Alice and Dana beautifully. I love Alice’s comments like, “you’re such a girl and yet so helpless about girly things” and Alice being so sweet with Dana while she was sick in the bathroom. Their thoughts and fears which you expressed, are things that Eileen and her writers failed to say in Season 2. I’ve always loved the playful and sarcastic aspect of their relationship- very well written. I can’t wait till your next update!
i had chills the entire time of reading this story. It was amazing the way you wrote about al and dane’s love and i so hope beyond hope that you write more. Please post soon
wow that was amazing! please post soon!
this is great I am just catching up so I hope that u have already post again