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All The White Horses: Part Two (2/5)
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When Alice returned Helena was in the middle of a fiercely blushing
protest in regards to her feelings for the writer which immediately
ceased with her presence. But even if it hadn’t, any protests from
Helena in regards to her crush on Alice would’ve been in vain because
Dana had been in her position once and she knew what it was like. How
it felt to go from being someone who was completely alone, trapped in
the image of what people thought you were and what they wanted you to
be, from someone that suddenly had Alice. And how intoxicating it felt
to realize that she didn’t see you for anything other than who you
really were and to know that she wanted to hear your problems, that she
wanted to spend time with you, and that she wanted to comfort you about
things you felt were silly and stupid.
And most of all, Dana knew how impossible it was to not fall at least a little bit in love.
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Five days had passed since the lumpectomy and Dana had been released
from the hospital although part of her wondered if that was really
accurate. She was required to make so many visits to the hospital for
her follow up chemotherapy and radiation treatment that it seemed at
times as if she never left. Dr. Fields recommendation to use a
neoadjuvant treatment appeared to work minor wonders, reducing the size
of the tumor enough that she could avoid having a radical mastectomy
and Dana couldn’t quite express how grateful she was for this.
Growing up, Dana had never been particularly concerned with her looks
in terms of what clothing she wore and how her hair was styled. She
enjoyed the times when her parents would plan a night out on the town
for the family because it was a fun sort of game to her. Dressing up in
whatever fancy gown that her mother helped her choose and hooking her
arm into her father’s when they entered the beautifully ornamented fine
arts theater to sit in the exclusive balcony box seating because of the
money their parents donated as patrons.
Those were some of the happiest moments in her life but it wasn’t real
to Dana. The girl in those beautiful gowns with perfect hair and an
easy smile wasn’t her. It was just a fun bit of make believe and that
was all right with her. Part of her wondered, in those dark years where
she had been closeted and felt so desperately alone, if her parents
wanted things to be different. That they would prefer if the make
believe Dana that was elegant and pretty and the stereotypical feminine
ideal so many people seemed to hold close to their heart was their
daughter instead of the clumsy and plain creature that they got.
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OK – I just read the first chapter and this one – dreiser – awesome. truly. funny, sweet, sad, hopeful and bittersweet. I’d expect nothing less from you though. Very well done!
That was beautiful. Awesome writing as usual. Great way to end that chapter. Looking forward to the next.
Absolute perfection. I’ve said it before and I’ll say it again no doubt, but your writing is amazing. And I’m not just talking about the grammar, which is a big pet-peeve of mine, but I’m talking about the way you portray and characterize each character to form. You perfectly write and vocalize Alice and Dana (no doubt because of your love for the characters), but you also have a good sense for portraying all of the others. I know you love Helena, as do I, and I like how you are forming her as she’ll hopefully be portrayed in S3 (although I do like snarky Helena too!). I know where this story is heading, mainly from checking in at your journal for updates, and I’m still excited about it because of how it’s written. Anyway, long-winded I know, but I have to give accolades to your talent.
Awww i am soo inlove with this story! The way you write the characters is spot on! This chapter was just amazing! Please update soon
Thank you for this story. Yours are stories I can read over and over again and always love. Perfect.
Simply Awsome, I hope the actual season of Alice and Dana’s relationship is at least half as good as it is in your story, keep up the great work!!
That was great. Your writing is amazing. I love angst and there was enough to go around in this chapter. Their love confession was…beautiful. Great job.
I have read it more than one time and I found more and more things that I like in your story. I said before but danish has unbelieveble writers, thanks.
Hiya, I’m a silent lurker, BUT your stuff is great…the only other person here with as much talent to hold my attention is Ms.Layla_Gray, but you capture the couple like no one esle…keep it up and you have another fan here….Peace.
IC created the characters, but I am amazed by how well you “get” them. I’m sitting here at my desk feeling happy because Alice and Dana were able to admit their feelings for each other. At the same time there is a bittersweet feeling because there is a good chance that the overall ending of the story will not be happy. It’s sad that two people who were so well suited for each other and so in love had to waste so much time. But it makes for a great story for us. I will bide my time re-reading the first two parts until you post again. Thanks for another wonderful story.
I usually lurk, but I just had to comment. Beautiful. Your writing is simply beautiful. The character development, the story development, I feel more like a voyeur than a reader!! Thank you!
Amazing! I had butterflies in my stomach the entire time I read this story. You write Alice and Dana beautifully. I love Alice’s comments like, “you’re such a girl and yet so helpless about girly things” and Alice being so sweet with Dana while she was sick in the bathroom. Their thoughts and fears which you expressed, are things that Eileen and her writers failed to say in Season 2. I’ve always loved the playful and sarcastic aspect of their relationship- very well written. I can’t wait till your next update!
i had chills the entire time of reading this story. It was amazing the way you wrote about al and dane’s love and i so hope beyond hope that you write more. Please post soon
wow that was amazing! please post soon!
this is great I am just catching up so I hope that u have already post again