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All The White Horses: Part Two (2/5)
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When Alice left for the bathroom and they were alone, Dana couldn’t
help herself from speaking on it. While she didn’t like to blame the
cancer for her actions that she knew were out of character or selfish
or just foolish, she couldn’t seem to help it. Just because she knew
that if she didn’t have this disease she wouldn’t be acting this way,
she wouldn’t feel this sudden urgent and consuming need to have things
the way she wanted them because she wasn’t sure how much time she had
left. Whether or not this was good in terms of her actions, Dana wasn’t
sure. All the same, that was the truth of the matter and it was why
Dana spoke.
Speaking to Helena of the insecurity, of the doubt she had from her
inexperience, of how she didn’t want to hurt Alice and the more she
didn’t want to hurt her the more hurt she seemed to cause. Then she
spoke on her selfishness, her greed, how she knew asking Alice to come
back to her, to help her now, wasn’t what was probably best for the
blonde but she couldn’t help it. She needed Alice with her now and she
wasn’t going to let anyone take her away.
There was silence and Helena said quietly that people were not property
and as such, they cannot be taken away. And she couldn’t even possibly
try with Alice. Because it would never succeed since Alice wanted to be
with Dana as much as Dana wanted to have her there. Then her jaw
tightened and her eyes narrowed and she said in tones that were deadly
soft that no matter how ill the athlete was, it should never be used as
an excuse to hurt Alice again. That if she truly wanted to be with
Alice then she had better go about doing it in a proper manner and not
muck it up as she had before. If she wanted Alice back the same
mistakes couldn’t be made, not only for the writer’s sake but for
Dana’s as well.
Above all, Helena said, she had better know for certain that this is
what she really wanted. Because if she changed her mind again, if she
told Alice she wanted her, loved her, and then took that away it would
surely finish the job of their first break up and destroy her.
Mulling over this, Dana looked up at Helena, her expression open and
honest and she said Alice was all that she ever wanted. She had somehow
lost sight of that but she wouldn’t make that mistake twice. And a
small smile from the heiress had been Dana’s reward. But then the
athlete felt a sudden bout of mischievousness seize her and she
pondered aloud if Alice’s best friends always fell in love with her.
Then she speculated on the merits of conducting a possible search for
the writer’s previous best friends, Ruth Caruthers in third grade and
Annie Flaherty during high school, to ask if this Alice related
phenomena applied to them as well.
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OK – I just read the first chapter and this one – dreiser – awesome. truly. funny, sweet, sad, hopeful and bittersweet. I’d expect nothing less from you though. Very well done!
That was beautiful. Awesome writing as usual. Great way to end that chapter. Looking forward to the next.
Absolute perfection. I’ve said it before and I’ll say it again no doubt, but your writing is amazing. And I’m not just talking about the grammar, which is a big pet-peeve of mine, but I’m talking about the way you portray and characterize each character to form. You perfectly write and vocalize Alice and Dana (no doubt because of your love for the characters), but you also have a good sense for portraying all of the others. I know you love Helena, as do I, and I like how you are forming her as she’ll hopefully be portrayed in S3 (although I do like snarky Helena too!). I know where this story is heading, mainly from checking in at your journal for updates, and I’m still excited about it because of how it’s written. Anyway, long-winded I know, but I have to give accolades to your talent.
Awww i am soo inlove with this story! The way you write the characters is spot on! This chapter was just amazing! Please update soon
Thank you for this story. Yours are stories I can read over and over again and always love. Perfect.
Simply Awsome, I hope the actual season of Alice and Dana’s relationship is at least half as good as it is in your story, keep up the great work!!
That was great. Your writing is amazing. I love angst and there was enough to go around in this chapter. Their love confession was…beautiful. Great job.
I have read it more than one time and I found more and more things that I like in your story. I said before but danish has unbelieveble writers, thanks.
Hiya, I’m a silent lurker, BUT your stuff is great…the only other person here with as much talent to hold my attention is Ms.Layla_Gray, but you capture the couple like no one esle…keep it up and you have another fan here….Peace.
IC created the characters, but I am amazed by how well you “get” them. I’m sitting here at my desk feeling happy because Alice and Dana were able to admit their feelings for each other. At the same time there is a bittersweet feeling because there is a good chance that the overall ending of the story will not be happy. It’s sad that two people who were so well suited for each other and so in love had to waste so much time. But it makes for a great story for us. I will bide my time re-reading the first two parts until you post again. Thanks for another wonderful story.
I usually lurk, but I just had to comment. Beautiful. Your writing is simply beautiful. The character development, the story development, I feel more like a voyeur than a reader!! Thank you!
Amazing! I had butterflies in my stomach the entire time I read this story. You write Alice and Dana beautifully. I love Alice’s comments like, “you’re such a girl and yet so helpless about girly things” and Alice being so sweet with Dana while she was sick in the bathroom. Their thoughts and fears which you expressed, are things that Eileen and her writers failed to say in Season 2. I’ve always loved the playful and sarcastic aspect of their relationship- very well written. I can’t wait till your next update!
i had chills the entire time of reading this story. It was amazing the way you wrote about al and dane’s love and i so hope beyond hope that you write more. Please post soon
wow that was amazing! please post soon!
this is great I am just catching up so I hope that u have already post again